Too Subtle Transitions

I think I have written in the past about not going through the turns in your message too quickly.  If you take a turn quickly you can easily lose the passengers.  I was just discussing this with a friend, particularly one type of transition that doesn’t work so well.  Let’s call it the “conjoined rhetorical questions” transition.  Hardly pithy, but descriptive nonetheless.

Here’s how it might look:

Perhaps you are thinking that this instruction seems challenging, or perhaps you are thinking about how you’ve already failed . . .

This kind of sentence can function like a hinge between two sections.  But I suspect your listeners may get lost in the turn.  Essentially the transition here, potentially a major one in the message, comes down to the following: “…or…” – what shall we say, milliseconds in length?  Certainly easy to miss and the listeners will then find themselves subtly confused by your talk of past failure when you are talking about instruction for us in the future (they missed the turn).

What would it look like to slow this down?  It will seem pedantic in written form, but remember, oral communication is different than written communication!

So there you have it: the passage asks something of us that isn’t easy.  Perhaps you’re thinking how challenging it seems?  I’m certainly finding this to be a challenging instruction.  Not easy at all.  But hang on a second, hold on.  It is challenging, but perhaps you’re not looking ahead to the challenge.  Perhaps, like me, you’re looking back because you have failed in this area in the past?  That’s another issue we have to think about.  It’s challenging, yes.  But what about past failure?  Let’s think about that . . .

Instead of milliseconds, now I’m taking around thirty seconds, plus pauses.

Be careful not to rely on a conjunction to achieve a transition.  Too easy to miss.  Too easy to lose people.  And if they are floundering for a minute or two, your message is not communicating.

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